Monday, October 29, 2018

How to begin your story...

In Room 25 we are learning to write an introduction (orientation) for our narratives (stories).

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Keywords to describe this picture:
- scorching hot, dry
- stampede - deafening sounds, thumping, rumbling, ground shaking, galloping
- rough rhino skin, tough
- sun setting, early afternoon
- crinkly sand
- rising sand clouds
- sand storms
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Your task Room 25:

Write a comment below with your introduction.

Remember an orientation (introduction) includes:
  1. Where (setting)
  2. When (time of day)
  3. Who (Characters)
  4. What (what the story is about)

In the early afternoon, the sun beats down on the desert sand like a tennis racket to a ball. A boy sits astride a rough skinned rhino, leading the charge. 

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  3. Frankie
    As the rhinos mammoth feet bashed at the sand like fly swats hitting the table. The dust rose like a spreading fire, I ran as fast as I could but it just wasn't fast enough...

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  4. Phillip

    In the early afternoon, a mamoth clowed of dust arises around the rough skind rhinos. A young boy perches on top of a colosal rhino leading the pack.

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    1. Hi Phillip, I really really like your introduction it is interesting. What is a clowed?

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    3. Then edit it and make it say cloud!

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  5. Isaac
    The sun beats down onto the scorching sand. Everything was silent other than the wind whistling.

    Loud thundering noises broke the silence, clouds of dust rose into the air as a stampede of rhinos dashed across the desert. Deafening sounds filled the desert as the enormous beasts charged through the the empty place. Suddenly, gunshots joined the thundering sounds, making it worse.

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  6. Devon

    One day there was a rhino. It was a dried skin rhino, that like running round.once it bang into a tree when it was closeing its eyes it had to go to the vet ang it got a million stiches. by Devon

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    1. Hi Devon I really like how you have don the detale of the number but not like some it is very fun to read
      By Murat
      Blog ya later

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  7. Claire
    As the boiling sun reaches it's highest point, in the middle of a scorching hot desert, sand clouds slowly rose from the sandy ground. A stampede of rhinos galloped away from a scary roaring coming from behind. A small boy sat at the top of the lead rhino, clinging to the rough and tough skin.
    The young boy urged the rhino to go faster afraid that they weren't going fast enough...

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  8. Matti

    As I charge with the rhinos the snakes catch up. The rhinos kick back the sand and knock the snakes back but it was not enough... the snakes struck the gigantic rhinos rough leg and I fall off I run but I tripped over a root and I run as fast as I can but it was not enough.

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  10. Name Zac
    There once was a stampede of rhinos that ran through a house and a boy jumped on a rhino and ran off into the sun set. 10 hours later the boy has tamed the rhinos and rhino boy he is angry and is wearing a rhino skull THE END.

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  11. Name:Murat
    Inside the hot scorching most burning place in earth, in the dessert . It was the middle of the day when it got a bit hotter. When you see a boy controlling a horde of rhinos. But that's not it there is a horde of cheaters running after them the next thing you know your riding a rhino with the boy.

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  12. Cleo

    As the sun starts sinking into the hills, a stampede of rhinos appear across the horizon of the scorching hot desert. As they come in to focus I see a young boy perched upon the lead rhino. Shortly after the boy appears so does the predator.

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  14. Marley R
    The burning boy prays for a source of water as he rides on a journy of a lifetime from Mali to Nigeria Africa.
    as he leads a pack of White Rinos
    to the farm witch is just across the border of Mali.

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  15. Elio

    In the early afternoon the sun beats down with pressure and force as a courageous child glides on the rhinos ruff skin. The rhino huffs as the boy rides the scorching hot rhino huffs in fear of the child ...

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  16. once there was a boy how lived with rhino,s in a desert and the the rhino,s were hunted by hunters.they wanted to hunt every rhino in the desert so the rhino,s made a run for it.

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  17. There was once a young boy riding a colossal grey rhino. The boy lead the rhino to where he thought his parents were. Then he thinks he hears his parent and maybe even see his parents. But was it his parents...

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  18. As the boy strolls through the scorching hot desert he was sweating a lot on his head, his brain was beating into his head. As the sun rises there was a loud noise which caused a rhino stampede, greyness passing the boy. It felt as if gravity was taking place and lifting me off the ground but it was a rhino lifting me.

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  19. Alyzae,

    The hot boiling sun rises high up in the sky as the rhinos huge mammoth feet try to sprint as fast as they can on the soft, light brown, wavy, sand. Enourmas grey rhinos were chasing him...

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  20. Jadarose
    As the scorching hot sun shadows down towards the group of rhino's, a little boy hops on to one of them. The Rhinos did not stop running because the boys father was trying to capture the rhinos because his father was following them.

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